it's like your heart is the boat, and these painful feelings are trapped there, waiting for some rain to wash them clean and away. pretty cool image there, Amy. i feel this way sometimes and could fully relate to it. i love how you express so much in so short of a poem. oh, wash me clean!
ok i have to agree with the others the line anout the flesh of your heart growing around your emotions is brilliant...its an interesting...thought...i've never heard of coner oberst...i enjoyed ...smiles ange
well then it should better rain a lot. as I read it you say that melancholy and pain will stay in your heart until some flood washes them away. correct me if I'm wrong. anyway the idea of your heart growing around your emotions is great and very original. it seems as if I should listen to Conor Oberst too, I'm a bit blocked at the moment. but I'm stuck with Metallica which isn't so bad either.
You got more here than I often get, but I understand. I don't want you to be put off by my comments, but you did ask and I'm just a B!tch to get on with sometimes because I am compelled to say what comes to mind, so forgive me if this seems harsh. The flavour is a bit bland here, even though the emotions are strong. No mystery no great punchline and no spicy analogies, see? I know that you are fond of this piece, but some things are written to please ourselves, while the things that others like often surprise us. Keep this close to your heart as a personal treasure. That is where it belongs. How can anyone understand that I keep some pretty ordinary stones in my bottom drawer and that each one has special significance...to me, and me alone.