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    dots Submission Name: Landlockeddots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 27
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       This was inspired by a Bright Eyes song called "One Foot in Front of the Other." The lines that inspired it are:

    I found a liquid cure
    For my land-locked blues
    It will pass away, like a slow parade
    It's leaving, but I don't know how soon

    That just got me thinking of other uses of "landlocked."

    Conor Oberst (who essentially is Bright Eyes) writes AMAZING songs and is a never-ending source of inspiration for me (He's really cute too). Check out his music if you're not familiar with it.


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    dotsLandlockeddots
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    The flesh of my heart
    grew around my emotions
    leaving the melancholy and pain landlocked
    trapped and waiting in a boat for a flood .





    Submitted on 2004-08-14 04:37:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      it's like your heart is the boat, and these painful feelings are trapped there, waiting for some rain to wash them clean and away. pretty cool image there, Amy. i feel this way sometimes and could fully relate to it. i love how you express so much in so short of a poem. oh, wash me clean!
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      ok i have to agree with the others the line anout the flesh of your heart growing around your emotions is brilliant...its an interesting...thought...i've never heard of coner oberst...i enjoyed ...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      well then it should better rain a lot. as I read it you say that melancholy and pain will stay in your heart until some flood washes them away. correct me if I'm wrong. anyway the idea of your heart growing around your emotions is great and very original. it seems as if I should listen to Conor Oberst too, I'm a bit blocked at the moment. but I'm stuck with Metallica which isn't so bad either.
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is pretty creative. Landlocked pain trapped and waiting for the flood. The flesh of the heart grew around the emotions. That is actually very deep.
    | Posted on 2004-08-25 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]
      You got more here than I often get, but I understand. I don't want you to be put off by my comments, but you did ask and I'm just a B!tch to get on with sometimes because I am compelled to say what comes to mind, so forgive me if this seems harsh. The flavour is a bit bland here, even though the emotions are strong. No mystery no great punchline and no spicy analogies, see? I know that you are fond of this piece, but some things are written to please ourselves, while the things that others like often surprise us. Keep this close to your heart as a personal treasure. That is where it belongs. How can anyone understand that I keep some pretty ordinary stones in my bottom drawer and that each one has special significance...to me, and me alone.
    | Posted on 2004-08-16 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]


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