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    dots Submission Name: Un-Spundots
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    Author: Belle De Jour
    ASL Info:    24/Female/Inside
    Elite Ratio:    3.79 - 335/367/53
    Words: 84
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       Some will understand and get it some will not...This is a selfish posting of mine. :)


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    dotsUn-Spundots
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    I have been spun while
    inhaling your chemical make-up
    With each breath your white smoke
    Fills my lungs and I become
    Wide eyed and euphoric
    This is all false

    As I pick up my broken shards
    I see the haziness of myself
    In the reflection of the glass
    The devil that you breed
    It is within me

    This revelation has lifted me
    Higher than you ever could
    I am filled with strength within
    Knowing I have un-spun myself




    Submitted on 2004-08-14 04:53:22     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very well done my friend. Unfortunatly, I'm one of those who *clears throat* doesn't get it. Sorry, but I tried. I like the way you make each individual piece it's own work of art so to speak. Kudos!
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by Celeste J. Bell | [ Reply to This ]
      ok, im going to have a shot at this, because this poem has intrigued me!
    the first stanze (or is that verse?) is from the perspective of a child watching her parents smoke (take drugs) and is enchanted by it. The second is from her perspective years later when her life is shattered and controlled by the seductive beast that allured her years earlier...the final part is her revelation, kind of like the first step in AA, recognition of her problem and the power she has to "un-spin" the drug addiction. I hope im on track with all that.
    I found this piece refreshing to read because it made me think about what it is you are trying to communicate, but without being so twisted in abstract language that it becomes impossible to interrpret. Good good stuff!
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by Watchman | [ Reply to This ]


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