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    dots Submission Name: Fantasies of Degradationdots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 60
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsFantasies of Degradationdots
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    He has no real bruises,
    so he writes his false pain,
    his fantasies of degradation
    in blue or black.
    He has no real scars,
    so he gets tatoos
    to break up the perfection.
    He affects bad habits
    to make himself interesting,
    and he has no soul
    because the inside doesn't show,
    and he's too busy being fake.




    Submitted on 2004-08-14 06:08:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      yes we all know a faker. this poem was short but sweet. it left me wanting more. maybe you should continue the story of this faker. that would be neat like a continuation of the story.
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by BoyUnderGlass | [ Reply to This ]
      ahh .. a great poem with a great message..everyone can put on the appearance of a pained artist.. problem is how do you tell the difference?
    you paint a great picture of this character.. he sounds arrogant and not in the least bit likeable.. which again (you must get tired of hearing me say this).. is so impressive in such a short poem
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
      ah, the faker among us... i like this for its exposure of those who like to affect airs about who and what they are... how do we really know about someone when they prance and dance or moan and wail, throwing out their fakeness with such ease? "...because the inside doesn't show..." yeah, how true. and what a lonely existence in the end.
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      He affects bad habits
    To make himself interesting

    well, bad boys are interesting, at least for me. but not fake bad boys. there are a lot of people out there trying to be someone they're not. very insightful poem. it's different from your other stuff but I like it nonetheless.
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      wow cuddle this is a truthful write...you just described my brother seriously...oh and your pic is awesome...anyways i liked the idea of the tatoos as scars...and i don't know i really don't think the last line is needed just because when i read it i understood he was being fake ...though there was probably a reason to why you put that line in ...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      Amy... this is very different! I like it! A very insightful piece because I've often wondered about some people, if they really have had that much [censored] in their lives.. and then also the people who say that "nothing" has happened to them. It just seems mad how it's one extreme or another.
    So he fabricates it. I could completely believe that. I just read joequinn's papercuts and while I'm not insinuating anything against Joe, it's just a bit odd the way they follow together, LOL!
    I think you're doing well, lately...
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a strange person you describe. I suppose there has to be at least one such person in the world, on the other hand, there may onl;y be one person in the world who is not like that...hmmm?
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by Lelik | [ Reply to This ]
      Well, it's a problem really. When someone is killing his true voice, this inner one, in order to:

    "make himself interesting"

    But the reason must be somewhere around actually. He can't be totally guilty for what he is trying to be or achieve. I thing it's a serious thing. I like the idea of tatoos very much. And the title is great too. Well written.
    | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by Nightraven | [ Reply to This ]
      i dont know if theres anything that can be said about this... its so clear and so wow... im sure we all know ppl like this... but what i dont understand about such ppl is WHY they would wanna have horrid lives... if they dont know pain why dont they realise how blessed they are are keep it that way... grrr... anyways... i like the idea of the tattoo's... very well done
    | Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Here is a piece worthy to be included in your poetry compilation. It speaks to me of truth. Really! It is strong and everything I like in poetry.

    Here is a man...no soul, no scars, no bruises...and yet he is compelled to have them. To be like everyone else. He cannot really be a part of the world otherwise because he does not know how to feel... he gives himself his scars/tattoos and affects his bad habits and masquerades as one of us. I see this. I really feel sorry for people like this, but I also fear them more than anything. Who knows what dark things lurk under that made-up persona.

    This is really quite a good piece. Substance, form and truth.
    | Posted on 2004-08-25 00:00:00 | by angela~ | [ Reply to This ]


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