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love is bondage


Author: love gone wrong
ASL Info:    27/m/colorado
Elite Ratio:    2.14 - 337 /381 /42
Words: 70
Class/Type: Poetry /Angst
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love is bondage



I try to let go,
to no avail
I try to flow,
without a sail
How do I free
this iron grip
Pull heartily...
it won't rip
LET GO!
My hands won't listen
arthritic, blind vision
hypocrisy from within
I must win
LET GO!
how?
I know,
cut 'em off at the wrist,
spraying bloody mist
Never again, will I be a hostage
to the iron grip; love is bondage




Submitted on 2004-02-18 15:41:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  good poem. but don't we all say that? at least until the next time we fall in love that is. Short memories ours.
shard
| Posted on 2004-04-13 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
  Being in a relationship is alot like kinky sex on the first night with someone you've just met. You feel precariously shackled..and do not know if and when you'll ever get out :D
Nice poem
-MyX
| Posted on 2004-03-15 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]
  I saw the word bondage and was enslaved immediately, lol. I love it though. the last 2 lines are utterly beautiful. Oh by the way, i'm getting my tattoo this saturday.
| Posted on 2004-02-18 00:00:00 | by Voodoo_Lounge | [ Reply to This ]
  this poem is amazingly true to how a lot of peoplehave felt at some time in thier lives about love. Especially me.
| Posted on 2004-02-18 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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