words arent enough
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i took bits and pieces of a convo i had with a friend who was going through a hard time-and kinda made it into a poem.......the truth is tho, the conversation never actually ended-so i dont know how to end this....so ne suggestions will help.....i mean, i can end the dialogue and just end it by sayin something else...idk
words arent enough
"no one likes me why am i here" "what are you talking about? everyone cares" "no they dont, i know thats a lie" "say that again, and i just may cry" "well, why does it hurt for me to breath, and why do i feel like no one notices me?" "dont mind them, they think they're too tough...i notice you, isnt that enough?" "yes it helps...but it's not the same...i feel incomplete...i feel so plain" "well everyone feels like that sometimes...i can help you feel better if u wanna try" "okay...well...i'll see where this goes" "believe me, u'll overcome all the bumps in the road...all u have to do is hold on, and soon enough you'll be feeling strong" |
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very cool form. A lot of "..." makes it hard on the eyes, though. Try to use semi-colons ( these things ;;;;) they seperate a thought without the use of a period| | Posted on 2004-08-14 00:00:00 | by winged_writer_robyn | [ Reply to This ] | |
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