Description: first in a long time my fellow elite members enjoy, i hope.
Tragedy I Presume -------------------------------------------
stir the brew as the cat purrs
creation held at a finger tip
all he is thinking is "what was her name?"
the mood is never right
he grows weary
couldn't sleep and moments wouldn't fade
the sun was waneing
all he saw was a frown
and a torn letter
only a couple blood droplets left on the floor
he tried but failed
tried again till the wounds were only holes
small ponds
where his guilt should be
his heart lies motionless
sleepless
hopeless
guiltless
only wanted happiness
he searched for happiness thats all he wanted
"don't search so hard because pain is all too easy to find." says all
he continued
now the brew boils
the cat stopped purring
awhile ago
but he kept petting
even though it was only a mahagony table
runs his fingers through his hair
he turns around
the body still lays there
he nudges it with his big toe
"that's too bad" he mumbles under his exhausted breath.
as he falls on top of her chest
he closes his eyes
in one sweet, slow motion
one tear falls next to the blood droplets
"she is breathing." he thought
"But that's still too bad."
That one swing changed his life.
That one hook swallowed his humantiy.
When she wakes, he dies.
i like the somewhat vagueness of this write... its not really clear what is going on... not really really anyways... but the feel of it... the distance of it... like someone is quite removed from the piece... whether its the reader/writer/boy i dont know... maybe its all three... i dunno... its very well done though... i really like it. has a very romeo and juliet feel to it too though im sure you prolly were aware of that already awesome write!
Wow. Made me feel like it's a reindition of Romeo and Juliet. Yet, it's so sad...I'm not sure I completely understand what the guy did. What I'm thinking though is something that only I would think. *rolls eyes* It's just interesting to see the viewpoint from the guy if it's what I'm thinking.