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    dots Submission Name: Scrapsdots
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    Author: redthewitch
    ASL Info:    36/f/tiny rural village
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 267/175/26
    Words: 39
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    Description:
       Work in progress for a new idea. Just had to get out a prelim. sketch, since my notebook is out of reach at the mo.


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    dotsScrapsdots
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    Fragile words
    scrawled on paper scraps
    tucked between the pages of a book
    Forgotten
    Pressed
    Delicate blossoms of love
    Until I open the book
    for other reasons
    and rediscover
    the tender flowers
    the sentiments
    Forget-Me-Not





    Submitted on 2004-08-16 00:33:03     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ohhh, that's beautiful. And I don't even think that you should change it from there because you've just summed it up so beautifully there.

    I like the title. I always loved the word "scraps" even though I thought this might be about a puppy :)
    Good work red, I like the idea of journals being pressed flowers of thought...
    | Posted on 2004-08-16 00:00:00 | by Learah | [ Reply to This ]
      So i just read the one before this and said I'd love to see it expanded. Then BOOM here this is. Man, what service!

    It makes a lot of sense and was pretty clever how you put all this down. My favorite part was that you chose to use a Forget Me Not flower. Cuz yeah, it's a flower, but within the context of the piece its like saying the page should not be forgotten. That's clever enough to make my head implode. Good Job.
    ~Aaron
    | Posted on 2004-08-17 00:00:00 | by MusingMinstrel | [ Reply to This ]


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