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    dots Submission Name: A Picture of Medots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 88
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       I decided to post something hopeful since Sell By Date wasn't the most chipper piece.


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    dotsA Picture of Medots
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    I found a picture of me
    tucked into a book I borrowed.
    I was shocked by the directness of my gaze,
    for I usually look down or sideways
    and put on a half-closed smile.
    I'd forgotten how I look without sallow skin
    or black circles around my eyes,
    And for once I didn't look awkward or shy.
    I even seemed to fit in
    with the cute stereotypes around me.
    For some reason, this Polaroid gives me hope,
    and you might not get it back.


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    Submitted on 2004-08-16 04:39:28     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i love the description here of the photo and the image of you now...its funny how a picture can say so much about someones life and the diffrence of how they feel about themselves...id say the photo you describe shows confidence ...that you somehow lost along the way...and the last line that little show of hope...a perfect ending...smiles ange
    | Posted on 2004-08-16 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh I really like the pictures, seems like you have some photoshop skills too.
    As for the poem, it is as classy as the picture :)
    To be the best part, is how you conclude it.
    Good work !
    | Posted on 2004-08-16 00:00:00 | by onehappypaki | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like the last line. great ending. I somehow can't stop thinking that it was your boyfriend who had this pic of you in the book you had borrowed him. and when you look at this poem that way it's a sweet little love poem. very well done, Amy.
    | Posted on 2004-08-16 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      What a fascinating idea. I don't think I've ever heard that concept before, but I wouldn't stake money on it.. it's still fun to think about. This approach is interesting because it doesn't even touch the subject of what the other person felt for you, or more directly why the photo was there to begin with. The piece solidifies the idea that your own self image is far more important than anyone else's image of you. The piece could even have a metaphoric connotation along those lines. I like it muchos.
    | Posted on 2004-08-16 00:00:00 | by Ontlogicalamity | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the last line, "you might not get it back." i usually hate seeing pictures of myself, but every once-in-awhile i'll see one that i actually like. keep looking at that picture when you're feeling funky and down to remind yourself of your outer beauty (as well as your innter beauty). i don't know if you know much about astrology, but as you are 28 (29 tomorrow!), you are in your Saturn Return, which is when Saturn returns to the place it was at your birth. very significant time in life in which your whole life can be turned upside down. changes, re-arranges, and usually for the good and positive.
    | Posted on 2004-08-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]


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