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    dots Submission Name: Orchad of Dreamsdots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 23
    Class/Type: Prose/Happy
    Total Views: 852
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       I was driving through an orchard in Northern California & this just came. It's very choppy but it came to me & there you have it. Love, Peace, Joy, Grace, Faith!!!

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    dotsOrchad of Dreamsdots

    Sower of
    Row upon
    a perfect
    ripened glance
    groves of
    fruit sweet
    sound bite

    Submitted on 2004-08-16 16:48:10     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! Thank u 4 tour comments on Orchard of Dreams. I appreciate it and it was a day I needed some uplifting words! Love, Pace, Joy!
    | Posted on 2004-09-29 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      At first glace it did not make any sense. I had to read it twice. But that is what I like about this poem.
    It not meant to be read fast, and it echoís in your head when you read it back.
    (Or thatís just me.)
    I could say that it needs more wording but that would ruin it.
    It finishes right. I think that it is a wonderful piece and should be published.
    And that is all I got to say about it.
    Cause that poem has differently blown my mind away.
    | Posted on 2004-09-20 00:00:00 | by Bailey19 | [ Reply to This ]
      i hate it when people say you need to write more! if you had wanted to, the poem would've been longer! duh! i like it 'cause it's just like you were zipping along and saw this orchard, so you wrote it down. it's like a little taste of the fruit on the vine. i like it! (your title should be Orchard, not Orchad).
    | Posted on 2004-08-16 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      I love how this was just short and sweet and to the point. Truly awesome how words can be so powerful when using so few. Don't you agree. You did good! Ciao!
    | Posted on 2004-10-24 00:00:00 | by BCute | [ Reply to This ]

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