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    dots Submission Name: Moral Crusadersdots
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    Author: GhiHaD
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 46/64/24
    Words: 57
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 677
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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    Description:
       silly little poem that came to my head one night after a night with friends at a pub.... damn alcohol :)


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    dotsMoral Crusadersdots
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    Motionless
    Steady and lifeless
    These moral crusaders happen to be near
    The woodlands over the estuary
    Are filled with nocturnal protectors
    Shed light onto the treetops
    To eliminate their powerful force
    Perceptive soldiers
    Tripping their way across the land
    Deceived by the truth
    Trusting in you in this time of impurity
    Moral crusaders rise to the occasion




    Submitted on 2004-08-16 20:12:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Oh they will get you tho. You shouldn't mock them. Such impudence will surely result in...morality. Right. Well I found it funny, if not a little bit hard to understand.
    shard
    | Posted on 2004-08-16 00:00:00 | by particularshard | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this piece, surprised it came to you while intoxicated...lol. It says a lot, yet I still can't pinpoint (for myself) the exact moral lesson of it, but its coming. I like the vividry of this piece, how the pictures light up, yet they are only figurative, very cool. I don't think that it quite makes it too my favorite list, but close. My only suggestion is that you clean up the typos just so they won't distract from the piece, its not too big of deal, but still...good write.

    ~Anarius~
    | Posted on 2004-08-16 00:00:00 | by Anarius | [ Reply to This ]


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