how sweet! i also love the rain and i love to play in it. i always thought that being with the one you love in a rain shower would be one of the most romantic scenes ever. you portryed it nicely. i could really see it happening!
Definitly a romantic part of you is showing in this. I love how you painted your own picture with words. It's jsut such a lovely thought, kissing in the rain. Hmm...now you got me all lovey and sentimental, thanks. The wording was nice, and I like the touch you put on everything you write. I'm just wondering what was your inspiration for this piece? What made you feel so light as to write a touching piece? ...I'm in love with this. Great work dear friend!
Holy crap. This is flawlessly crafted. Every syllable is perfect. You've done the Tanka style a great honor and presented its beauty in a most artistically inclined way. Too bad this is horribly boring. Rain fall, whispers, love, soft breath, sweetness of your kiss. There is absolutly NOTHING of interest here that hasn't already been done to death. If you wrote this when you were 6, I would be impressed. You got the format perfect... But it seems as though you've failed in every other aspect of writing than syllables...which is alot. I'm glad these simpletons are impressed...because I sure aint. (Not bad for attention deficit disorder huh?) I really did give this a chance, but with my disorder, I look for something new, all the time. This set me back.
huh!...rubs eyes and stretches...sorry the rain always puts me to sleep and so did this poem...though the tanka form is ...but the words...why if your going to put all this effort would you write about a subject so over used...making it sound like a fourteen year old...doing a project for english class...as she writes with her pink pencil...her boyfreinds name written on her hands, notebook and whatever else ...and she sqeals thinking of how he kissed her and said i love you for the first time even though he just really wants in her pants...so she sits and thinks of him why she writes...how romantic...ange
Ouch...that'll leave a mark! See? I'm not THAT bad, hehe. Seriously though, it was well written, althought I don't little about the form, it is pleasant and sings well...but purple is right in saying that if your going to put that much time and effort into the form, give us something...i dunno...else! MyX