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    dots Submission Name: soul guardiandots
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    Author: E. M. Dougherty
    ASL Info:    18/f/ny
    Elite Ratio:    4.45 - 27/39/10
    Words: 243
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 365
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1670



    Description:
       This is actually the internal conflict going on inside of me, but its also for someone who just may need a friend or confident. I can't decide if this should be poetry or song lyrics. Its actually sounds really good to a certain tune. I dunno, you tell me. Enjoy!


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    dotssoul guardiandots
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    no one listens, no one cares.
    despite what you may think,
    I'll always be there.

    I'm choking on the words
    that I've waited so long to say.
    can't keep breathing, my heart stopped beating.
    I'm sorry, but this ain't easy.

    I know how you feel when you lay awake alone.
    I know you are more on the inside, more than what's shown.
    don't be afraid, don't be scared.
    Cause all of the monsters you were afraid of
    aren't really there.

    the conflict is raging inside yourself.
    just cast your fears and doubts aside.
    don't drown in the lonliness, emptiness.
    don't give up;
    I know how hard you tried.

    I know that it gets scary,
    but you try not to think so.
    you have a very heavy load to carry,
    but promise me,
    you won't let go.

    I'm choking on the words
    that'd I've waited so long to say.
    fear ain't fleeting, my wounds are bleeding.
    but I can't tell you any other way.

    I know you're trapped inside
    and I know you're crying,
    though you try to stop the flow.
    I know you're thoughts collide
    and I know you're dying.
    if you need me just tell me so.

    please.
    I don't know any other way to say this.
    how can I make you understand?
    please.
    believe me when I say I'll be there for you
    and I'll always
    Always
    hold your hand.





    Submitted on 2004-08-18 17:04:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      ...you made me cry...jerk... j/k but you did make me cry. Wow. that's deep... it would make a great song or poem, either way...WOW. my "Friends" abandoned me, so right now all i have is Jesus to talk to. But that poem made me realize that i still have my family and my elite writers to share my pain. so thanks and that really is a wonderful poem
    | Posted on 2004-08-18 00:00:00 | by winged_writer_robyn | [ Reply to This ]
      ok now with some changes and work, this could make a great song. I know this is written straight from your heart. you hit me hard where it counts the most. i know what the beauty of friendship is. this can easy become a hit song. keep up the good work.
    | Posted on 2004-08-18 00:00:00 | by hotrodruss | [ Reply to This ]
      this poem really makes me think. i have this great friend. a truly great friend. she was always there for me and stopped me from hurting myself. i call her my hero and my angel. shes always promised to be there for me no matter what and kept telling me that "to make me fully understand". we dont talk anymore. we got in a stupid fight over nothing really but it got mean. ive been missing her but not telling anyone. this makes me think about her alot, and miss her...to tears. thanks for writing this. its very beautiful.
    | Posted on 2004-08-18 00:00:00 | by birdy5005 | [ Reply to This ]
      This is so deep. it's really cool. It just seems as if it flowed from you about this one idea, and in the process a lot of others just came out. Amazing.

    Can't keep breathing, my heart stopped beating.
    I'm sorry, but this ain't easy.

    I love these two lines. You're saying you're dying and then you are coming to terms with yourself and how much it hurts with that one line. It's genious and flows so beautifully.

    -emo.
    | Posted on 2004-08-20 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]



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