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    dots Submission Name: Unsolved Mysterydots

    Author: solitary_cross
    ASL Info:    19/female/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 92/107/24
    Words: 120
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    dotsUnsolved Mysterydots

    Iím not the person inside me
    Lurking in my mind and soul
    Having trouble knowing who I am
    And what my fate beholds

    Iíve searched far and wide
    Across the oceans and seas
    On vast horizons and majestic sunsets
    Yet I canít find me

    I canít take this anymore
    Too much for me to accept
    My mindís already confused
    And my heartís in deep torment

    My feelings are betraying me
    Pulling me down to the ground
    Darkness slowly descends upon me
    And alas, there is nothing to be found

    But still I have to continue
    Still got to move on
    For I can never solve this mystery
    To reveal who I am at all

    Submitted on 2004-08-21 04:33:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I like this a lot. It flows easily and provides a lot of insight into the ongoing search for 'self'... My fav part is: "I canít take this anymore
    Too much for me to accept
    My mindís already confused
    And my heartís in deep torment". Good work!
    | Posted on 2004-08-21 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]
      O good rhyming scheme !
    "On vast horizons and majestic sunsets
    Yet I canít find me"
    Some days back I heard someone say that if you truly 'find' your ownself you would beat gravity, and you would find everything that is hidden from eyes.
    I really like this peice !
    | Posted on 2004-08-21 00:00:00 | by moaxcym | [ Reply to This ]
      I really liked this one as well. Its a good poem overall but I wish it could be a little more descriptive. The flow itself was outstanding as I followed it perfectly. It was great and your pic is great, I really like it.
    | Posted on 2004-08-21 00:00:00 | by Kenji Light | [ Reply to This ]

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