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    dots Submission Name: Mirrordots

    Author: solitary_cross
    ASL Info:    19/female/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 92/107/24
    Words: 168
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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       This is about a person who is confused about his personality

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    A smile…
    Yet a frown deep inside
    A laugh…
    But uncontrollable tears to hide

    A joke to give out…
    But a confession to say
    Why don’t you tell it now?
    Before it’s all too late to say

    Running away from reality
    You’ve got to show your true self
    Or you’ll crumble you’re life away

    People like you more if you’re true
    The person they used to know
    What will you get from doing this?
    Only sorrow, I say…

    You thought it would be easier
    For your life to go on
    Disguising as an innocent fool
    And thinking that you are alone

    You need someone…
    Someone to talk to, to hold on to…
    Yet you turn your back
    Acting as if you don’t feel anything at all

    You’re being so foolish about yourself
    Rejecting your own feelings
    Being so insensitive…
    So numb… so frozen…

    Staring at the lifeless figure
    My mind shattered in confusion

    Sigh... a mere reflection…

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      good poem !
    I really like the start
    sometimes it do happens
    a smile tried to hide the woe inside.
    And one tried to deceive one's self !
    I must say that it does work at times !
    Good poem !
    | Posted on 2004-08-21 00:00:00 | by moaxcym | [ Reply to This ]
      well seems like something i would think about but never really write down words for a poem. i think alot of people feel they need to hide a part of them that others wont understand or wont like, but hiding out and running away from your true self is really unhealthy. i should know that from experience, you just have to follow your own standards and don't try to be someone you're not to please other people. good luck and good job
    | Posted on 2004-08-21 00:00:00 | by playcrackthesky | [ Reply to This ]
      Its good and I like the twist at the end because the character being described is the character of the writer. Its great. I've got quite a few like this but I'll just come up with something random on the spot because I don't want to submit anything more on my page, I am already too far behind on my comment ratio to continue to post.

    The mirror's on the wall,
    Shattered fragments showing seperate parts,
    Of a face broken by the rise and fall,
    of the rampant beating of their hearts.

    Crestfallen are those who see themselves,
    and cursed are those that see monsters.
    For surely they are toys upon the shelves,
    Until they begin to fall, victims of failures.

    Blessed are those that see nothing,
    For within the mirror truth is seen.
    The reflection a product of self loathing,
    As our image remains unclean.

    Shattered is the mirror as am I.
    Fine glass pieces with no reflections to hold.
    For we hated what was in our mind's eye.
    For we hate the truth the mirror told.
    | Posted on 2004-08-21 00:00:00 | by Kenji Light | [ Reply to This ]
      ooh...i really like this one. Don't think I have ever read anything like it, definately original. Your really good, keep it up
    | Posted on 2004-08-23 00:00:00 | by drk_angl_17 | [ Reply to This ]

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