White roses. by kellz

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Submission Name: White roses. dots

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Author:	kellz
ASL Info:	25/F/England
Elite Ratio:	2.97 - 122/148/49
Words:	75

Class/Type:	Poetry/Passion
Total Views:	443
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	431

Description:
just something i wrote after seeing white flowers in my doctor surgery and no one else noticed them.

White roses. dots

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In the middle of a busy room
nobody stops to smell the roses.
They only rush on by.
On a table in a vase white roses
stand.
Its a clear april morning
and the roses start to die
the petals start curling.
The roses make one wish to
see a may morning sunshine.
the roses crumble and die
and the only person who notices
is the only person to cry.

Submitted on 2004-08-21 14:26:06 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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2: I dunno...
3: meh!
4: Pretty cool
5: Wow!

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  I like the idea of these roses in the hospital that no one notices but the person who is getting ready to have surgery. It's kind of like you were meant to see them, to bring some sort of peace upon you. I don't know, I can tell that this could be interpretated a few different ways, especially given the fact that the roses do wilt and die before seeing May, but thats how I thought it was cool.
| Posted on 2004-09-09 00:00:00 | by Mister Fizzle | [ Reply to This ]
  Hmm the flow was remarkable. The poem is soo true. Why is everyone is such a [censored] rush nowadays. we need to cherish the small things. you said it well! good poem i am looking forward to reading more of your poems
| Posted on 2004-08-21 00:00:00 | by BoyUnderGlass | [ Reply to This ]
  This works well as metaphor… Simple, but true. I don't much like the final 2 lines; they feel kind of twee and cheesy to me, even though I see the point they make. But overall I do like the poem. Becky
| Posted on 2004-08-21 00:00:00 | by SugarMouse | [ Reply to This ]
  I didn't like the poem originally until you tied it all together at the end, the last 2 lines were awesome and a very nice wrap up, good job, continue to write, sending you roses...Bob:)
| Posted on 2004-08-21 00:00:00 | by poetryman | [ Reply to This ]
  i have to say that i really liked this piece. i have not read any of your work lately but i am glad i did. the title cought my eye. great job lia
| Posted on 2004-08-21 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
  i like this because your right most people dont notice the simple beautiful things...in life..and ilike the affect of the last lines ...of how onlythe person crying notices them...the only lines that i think are sort of cheesy are the part about the roses wanting to see a may morning...but besides that this poem was nice...smiles ange
| Posted on 2004-08-22 00:00:00 | by purplesun24 | [ Reply to This ]

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