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Author: realpassion
ASL Info:    27/Male/Nigeria
Elite Ratio:    3.17 - 81 /70 /50
Words: 114
Class/Type: Poetry /Satire
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Instinct it was which directed
Mr realpassion at street thirty-seven
Dot com to visit a cyber-cafe nearby.
Little did mikky know that he will meet
Stacy on the subway.
Nontheless, they had a rendezvous tagged
'Mikextacy' at yahoo dot ca lane.
Next, on his way home; he smile2mikoz
At hotmail crescent who mistook him
For a lunatic, and dialled Doc psykogeniuz
Number at yahoo dot com avenue.
But, the Doc diagnosed him fifteen minutes
Later as mentally balanced,
And he made for his favourite spot
---The cyber-cafe.
To confirm if he's gotten any mail
In his inbox...




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