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    dots Submission Name: Wingsdots
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    Author: deadpoet
    ASL Info:    18/f/ Miami, Fl
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 44/66/27
    Words: 269
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
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    I thank you for the wings you gave me;
    They spread over the hinges of my back and lifted me away.
    For the first time I had heard the chirping of the birds,
    And for the first time had I touched the stars.

    I thank you for your gift of bliss that enveloped my heart,
    As my soul finally came free from its bounded chains,
    And for the first time I could dream again,
    And for the first time could I feel the liberty in my heart.

    I thank you as you rang the bell of heaven into my ear;
    It mesmerized me into the river of dreams,
    And for the first time I tasted the sweet ambrosia of the gods,
    And for the first time had I heard the silence of nature.

    I thank you for the way you painted a piece of my life,
    Adding color with your brush, the essence to every moment,
    And for the first time I felt myself tower over the everlasting mountains.
    And for the first time had I felt the kiss of the wind.

    I thank you for the lyrics you played as you stroke upon Apollo's golden lyre,
    I could have heard the One of Truth himself from Olympus above,
    And for the first time I had smelled the rose of love,
    And for the first time had I felt my shadow die.

    I thank you for the crown you gave me;
    It released my pains and discord,
    And as you lifted me up with your wind,
    I was swept away to my Lord.




    Submitted on 2004-08-22 19:12:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I can't really imagine who this poem was directed to...And why you would write of your own death. I can't really see the purpose yet. I may just be stupid. I kind of have an idea of what this could mean, but it's bizzare. It was beautiful and mysterious, especially mysterious, and you do have a wide vocabulary. I suggest you make like a word key in your description to cause others to understand your work more and therefor educate everyone else. Cause if someone has to look up words excessively they get fed up and move on.
    BY ALL MEANS I am not saying constrict your vocab, just offer a word bank...it's fun learning new words. Anyhoot, beautiful piece, I'd like you to contact me on the precise meaning, would you?
    | Posted on 2004-08-22 00:00:00 | by Indi Elf | [ Reply to This ]



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