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    dots Submission Name: the last ridedots

    Author: austin
    ASL Info:    22/ Male/ Odessa, Texas
    Elite Ratio:    4.41 - 376/396/84
    Words: 272
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       just something i thought up

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    dotsthe last ridedots

    tonight is the night, i live all my dreams
    for once, i'm not ripping at the seams.
    my vision once clouded, like light in the fog
    it's a wonder, that i even got out at all
    just when i thought i was goin to fall
    i landed feet-first, and walked away tall

    tonight is the night, that i let this go
    years of nagging and churning, no more
    im stronger now, no longer need to show
    something i'm not, i'm all that i've got
    and that is all that you need to know.
    i have weathered the storm,
    from the beginning to end, i'll suffer no more

    on the wheels of the fire chariot i ride,
    i no longer have everything to hide
    it's all in the open, i always had been hoping
    to get this thorn out of my side
    to get this feeling of free, after so long
    feeling now, that i can't go wrong
    as for right now, i know that i'm strong
    stronger than i was, and have ever been
    not clouded with lies, nor laden with sin
    ive been aroung once, been around twice
    i've finally stopped, and Lord it feels nice.

    ride to the sun, this is the last trip
    wave good bye, to the people i'll miss
    im finally at peace, i'll forever be free
    the red glow of the sun is the last thing i'll see
    baby i hope you know that i love you
    and when i'm there, i'll think of you
    i'll often think, of your eyes loving me
    just know that i'm here, i'm finally free

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      nice poem dude. Its good cuz its to be free and to be yourself even it may not be easy but it sure is worth it in the end.

    | Posted on 2007-09-23 00:00:00 | by DaGrimReaperess | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow...I know you wrote this like...what...2 years ago? ....But uhh...I guess it could apply to now huh? I know you know the last lines kill me...but...I dunno..just the way you talk about being free....and how damn good it feels. If this is how you feel now about life...I am very happy for you. I guess friends just want friends to be the happiest they can be. And I guess as long you don't forget those people that you'll miss, and that they'll always have a place in your heart, that's all anybody can ask for. The freeness you talk about here, being at peace with no burden....I guess it's what we're all looking for. I sure as hell hope I find it. I'm glad I read this tonight...ttyl. ~hailie~
    | Posted on 2007-02-14 00:00:00 | by loveispain | [ Reply to This ]
      I added this to my favourites a while ago and now I'm going through the list again and this is one of the ones I still really love it so much.
    | Posted on 2006-01-06 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      This is a really awesome poem. I love the thought behind it, and I have just fallen in love with this poem, it's definitely one for the favs. I love the beginning, it's powerful and it pulls people in. And it didn't falter like some poems do; it stayed strong the whole way through. I liked the ending too, I can't really put into words what I want to say and it's really frustrating me right now, so bare with me, lol.
    In the end, you can see how the person is already getting seminostalgic, but at the same point, you know it's for the best...if that makes sense.
    Anyway, this is a great write and I look forward to reading more of your work.
    | Posted on 2005-08-08 00:00:00 | by painofthanatos | [ Reply to This ]
      freedom is the only word for it, I like how your going to ride to the sun...my favorite lines were:

    Just when I thought I was going to fall
    I landed feet first, and walked away tall...
    one the wheel of the fire chariot I ride
    I no longer have everything to hide...
    Just know that I'm here, that I'm finally free

    Gee whiz that was the shiznit, I really liked it, it made me wanna feel freer if that's even possible for me
    | Posted on 2004-08-23 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]

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