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    dots Submission Name: Pride and Shamedots
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    Author: ariadne
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 99/85/26
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Subtitle: Heroes and Junkies


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    dotsPride and Shamedots
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    you're so doubtful
    so check it and see
    everyone is looking
    now they're looking to be

    It's all a cause
    so join up and fight
    be quick to spill blood
    or loose torrents tonight

    They're addicted
    give tham all they want
    much better off dead
    joyful faces turn gaunt

    they both had lost
    sad start to finish
    and lit their own fires
    the match be the witness




    Submitted on 2004-08-23 20:09:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      really good poem. no criticism here besides the little typo all the other have already mentioned. but I like the subtitle better than the original one. for me it sounds more interesting than 'Pride and Shame'. but that's just me.
    | Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]


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