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Submission Name:
Pride and Shame
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Author:
ariadne
Elite Ratio:
4.11 - 99/85/26
Words:
70
Class/Type:
Poetry/Misc
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Subtitle: Heroes and Junkies
Pride and Shame
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you're so doubtful
so check it and see
everyone is looking
now they're looking to be
It's all a cause
so join up and fight
be quick to spill blood
or loose torrents tonight
They're addicted
give tham all they want
much better off dead
joyful faces turn gaunt
they both had lost
sad start to finish
and lit their own fires
the match be the witness
Submitted on 2004-08-23 20:09:24
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really good poem. no criticism here besides the little typo all the other have already mentioned. but I like the subtitle better than the original one. for me it sounds more interesting than 'Pride and Shame'. but that's just me.
| Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by
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