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    dots Submission Name: My Words of Wastedots

    Author: ariadne
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 99/85/26
    Words: 85
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsMy Words of Wastedots

    If I could get past it
    I could write again
    learn to cry tears with words
    drop the feeling; find the pen

    The verses in my head
    get lost within the ink
    make the thought misconstrued
    in value, makes it sink

    I blame the senselessness
    of keeping yourself in
    cold is the face of feign
    an empty trail where you've been

    Rich were the ones back then
    and now devoid of taste
    even bitter sorrow
    touches not my words of waste

    Submitted on 2004-08-23 20:15:16     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ireally like this. I'm not one for a set or constant rhyming pattern, but you kept it natural so it worked very well. We all know this feeling, trying to write down what is so easy to think but becomes lost in the ink we waste. Thanks for sharing, keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-08-23 00:00:00 | by ACircuitShock | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting. i can honestly say that, if this is how you view your writing, i've never heard it described in quite that way. i think this is really good and about the only thing that bothers me about it is the forced rhyme at the end of the second stanza. good job.
    | Posted on 2004-08-23 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]

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