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    dots Submission Name: Through The Glassdots

    Author: dado
    ASL Info:    22/m/uk
    Elite Ratio:    2.83 - 25/29/9
    Words: 93
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       This is for anyone who has an alcoholic as a loved one and is just som feelings I needed to get down on paper.

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    dotsThrough The Glassdots

    Does the bottle blur the vision
    Of the man that lies within
    A friendly smiling face
    Made sad by Vodka and Gin

    Is the glass blurring the sight
    Or a window to the clues
    To the tortures that hold him down
    To the band playing the blues

    Only those that have seen
    Both the Jekyll and the Hyde
    Know if the daily battle
    Is worth what lies inside

    But even with this knowledge
    A persons hope can fade
    Hopefully lasting long enough
    To pull him out of the shade

    Submitted on 2004-08-23 20:31:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I really liked this poem and the meaning it had behind it. The only proble I had was with the last line of the first and second stanza...each seemed really forced, even thoguh it added to the meaning. Maybe try rhymezone.com or something to find a similar meaning rhyming word. Otherwise it was a great piece:O)

    Something is up with your header...its stretches your page waaaaaaaay too long.
    | Posted on 2004-08-23 00:00:00 | by Superman | [ Reply to This ]
      hey, this is austin, i know exactly about this. as i was reading this poem, so many memories came back to me. memories that i thought had been driven under totally. friends, loved ones, family, i can say, for myself, i know alcaholics in all three categories. its so funny, these guys are the nicest people when they are sober- but i still dont know why the booze takes hold of them. it's painful, isnt't it? so yes i thought your poem was great. it was short, sweet and powerful and i thank you. take care. -austin-
    | Posted on 2004-08-23 00:00:00 | by austin | [ Reply to This ]
      i liked this. its a bitforced at times but it makes a very good point. behind every drunk is a person. people often overlook that as soon as they hear the A word. very good slightly sad poem.
    | Posted on 2004-08-25 00:00:00 | by nameless_nobody | [ Reply to This ]
      My father has a drinking problem so i can really see the meaning of this poem. it is great you really hit the nail on the head. Great insight.
    | Posted on 2004-08-25 00:00:00 | by Kapone | [ Reply to This ]

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