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    dots Submission Name: An Unkind Elegydots

    Author: AtrophyEmpathos
    ASL Info:    19 M California
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 45/55/29
    Words: 159
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotsAn Unkind Elegydots

    Despair, and fall
    Helpless before the Rage.
    No Hope to lose,
    No Heart to love,
    Despair and fall.
    Fall before the rage:
    Consumed and enveloped,
    Carried and destroyed.
    Cry out
    From the crushing blows
    that rain upon your heart.
    Lay down and embrace the cold,
    Draw in sharp breath:
    Emptiness like internal bleeding
    to carry away feeling and choice,
    To own the pain,
    To ignore the shrapnel,
    Jagged through a soft iris.
    Dream no more,
    Suffocate in sleep.
    With no trust,
    Fear all
    In a cradle sewn with nightmares,
    In a long forgotten room,
    Where pleading cries torment the mind:
    Attempts to pull away the gloom;
    They beg you to wake,
    To embrace the world,
    But you only hear murmurs.
    You long ago forgot the language of reality;
    You've drawn the coldest breath,
    Held it close to your heart,
    And let it suffocate.
    So I pray now
    Only that you do the same;

    Submitted on 2004-08-24 03:08:15     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Hey dude..I really dig this poem.. very sentimental with a touch of raw human/animal instinct emotion at the finnishing touch.. very awesome..and fuk all who haven't read this yet..I'm sick of all the fag ass depressed pusy shi.t on here... fuk the emo crap... keep it real man.. and Rock On!
    | Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by Ratmeat | [ Reply to This ]

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