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    dots Submission Name: ChloŽís Encounterdots
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    Author: drk_angl_17
    ASL Info:    23/f/TN
    Elite Ratio:    3.82 - 659/696/84
    Words: 267
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    Description:
       Well...If decided to take Emptied Embrace and rename it Seth's Release...It will be one of the last poems in this *series* that I've come up with. I simply mixed a few Ideas that ppl left in comments for me...This poem is the first in the series...hope its good enough....


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    dotsChloŽís Encounterdots
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    I see you there
    lurking in the shadows
    watching my every move.
    I hear your footsteps
    as you trail behind me
    on this deserted night.
    You think youíre cunning.
    You think Iím oblivious.

    I see you there
    under the moonlight
    with the moonbeams dancing
    in your dark, cascading hair.
    Your beauty attracts.
    Your blood is enticing
    pulsing through your body
    such a sweet fragrance.

    I swiftly turn
    to look into your face
    and what I see
    brings me to my knees.
    Your beauty, overwhelming.
    Your eyes, a deadly spell.
    You catch me when I fall
    and hold me in your arms.

    I have you now, my dear
    within mine arms.
    I can smell your fear
    mixed with your blood
    and your longing curiosity.
    Itís all too intoxicating.
    I want to know your soul.
    A small drink will suffice.

    Your lips are cold as ice
    as they brush against my neck.
    The slight pain that follows
    is quickly replaced
    by tides of extacy
    brought on by your kiss.
    Iím lost in this swoon
    and melting in your arms.

    Thatís enough for tonight, Love.
    I will leave you now
    in this swoon that Iíve caused.
    Doubt me not, my love.
    I will see you yet again
    if your heart so desires.
    The night is leaving
    and so shall I along with.

    I hear you speaking.
    Your breath at my ear
    but canít quite make out
    what you have to say.
    My swoon is ending now.
    I regain my balance
    as you take your leave
    with a slight kiss on the neck.




    Submitted on 2004-08-24 05:40:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ha i figured something out...chloe=zoe from silver kiss and seth=simon right? i am too too slow wow...hmm... the first two paragraphs remind me of the foirst two chapters in that book ( i have read at least a million times and almost can recite by heart! jk not really!

    your poems about seth and chloe are very similar to her book..very cool

    rhaine
    | Posted on 2004-09-12 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      wow eller-another long one. well good for you. do you ever write about anything other than vampires? i know you do. you should put some on here. id like to read them.
    | Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by sweet-fire | [ Reply to This ]
      This is an excellent vampire themed poem. I liked the way you didn't just come out and say that the character you were writing about was a vampire. I like poems that make me think instead of ones that just give you all the information without having to look deeper into the piece. Well done.
    | Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by Ravenwood | [ Reply to This ]


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