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Dare to Love


Author: Suven7
ASL Info:    20 female Fla
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Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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I read Evergreen, and it just happened to be a day of deep blue skies. Unscathed morning of leftover chicken, and a warm shower. And yeah, the family was together and getting alone, so I took advantage of the silence and wrote!


Dare to Love



Out my window it grows
Over a sill and reaching forth
Cascading leaves lapping gently
Reborn tendrils peeking north
And its perfume of love was tender
A refreshing sweep through our soul
And we weep for this pure flower for
Love, is joy and not a role

Unlike what you have seen
Or chose to view, the past decade
Has brought end to sleep
Now awakening to life anew
Rising up and rolling down you
Dare gaze at its magnificence of
Sweet honey and modest crown
Of a daily role we chose as friends




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  Again, it all fits together very well. Your description is very good and something to be admired.

Frank.
| Posted on 2006-08-27 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
  Some sweet words that seem to be overshadowed by something...else. I'll take a look at the first stanza. You surely have a way with words, Suven, and I keep rediscovering that fact. For it is a fact! Anyway...a truly nice job capturing the beauty in something so small, where there is perhaps more beauty than we realize. It's usually the small things that when we learn to appreciate, life becomes so much more wonderful, don't you agree?

Second stanza: very, very interesting. Maybe I'm reading between the lines too much. I know I am, and I have short of nothing to go on. So, while I could relate this to my own life, in a very different way most likely, I wonder about the story behind it. Behind every poem is a story and that's why I like reading what my friends write. I love it, actually. And so, I'm marking this as a favorites for the first stanza alone at least, because I'm not sure I understand the second. Which I'm guessing is probably how you intended it. A nice mystery. I have all summer.

Peace.
-Lucy
| Posted on 2005-07-01 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]
  The style is strange but I love the different and variated. Nice write---I enjoy and applaud your descriptions of love and it's power. I like this line personally: "Love, is joy and not a role"---and I do agree with your reasoning here. I admit it took me a while to grasp the internal meaning of the poem but I did within rereading the text and I found it quite stunning and descriptive- which I love as well. You have some real talent!
----wandering
| Posted on 2004-12-22 00:00:00 | by wanderingpoet16 | [ Reply to This ]
  i liked the rhyming cuz its unique like on this line

A refreshing sweep through our soul
And we weep for this pure flower for
Love, is joy and not a role

sweep and weep rhyme
soul and role rhyme

very clever of you i havent seen much of that style before.
| Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by BoyUnderGlass | [ Reply to This ]
  wow boyunderglass im glad you know which words rhyme with each other.. wow. Anyways I felt this was somewhat ordinary, because of the theme. You portrayed it nicely though, with pretty good rhyming.. though sometimes you switched to assonance. Good write and welcome to the site..

Bruno
| Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by brunov68 | [ Reply to This ]
  i have to ask the same thing as gobalata. about the rhym. i think that it was a good write over all and enjoyed it alot. good work lia
| Posted on 2004-08-26 00:00:00 | by lili | [ Reply to This ]
  Just checkin' if this commenting page works because THE OTHER ONE DIDN'T! Man! and to wait for the comments as I do!
| Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]


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