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    dots Submission Name: my only lifedots
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    Author: nameless_nobody
    ASL Info:    18 in a few days.
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 333/421/67
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       been away on vacation for 2 weeks and i had this in my head most the time. its just my reason for not wanting to waste my life in a dead end job. enjoy and give generously. lol. ehh just read it. oh and i know the line 'Got no reincarnation' souds a bit out of place i just couldnt find a beer way of putting that line. feel free to have a go.


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    dotsmy only lifedots
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    I don't believe in jesus,
    I don't believe in god,
    I got no heaven waiting,
    So this life is all i got,
    Got no reincarnation
    I got no paradise
    I got nothing waiting
    So i'll work hard on this life.

    S'all I got




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      Hey dude, You've got more than you think. Faith can make the ultimate turn-around ya know. You've got today. Turn it around and you'll make today your yesterday. You've muddled with your heart's lock to paradise. It has always been there, and you can open it again. To think you've been thinking such ...morbid thoughts. Inhale fresh air. You've got more than you think in You.
    | Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
      interesting but kind of sad; i mean, what's the point if there's not something better? anyway, I like this; I think it's a very honest look at your beliefs (or lack thereof) and I respect that. about the reincarnation line that you don't like, I can't really think of anything to go there. I originally thought maybe another form of "heaven," but now I think you should probably just change the line following. I think the "paradise" is a bit out of place. I also think you could break this into two, four-line stanzas and maybe concentrate on God and paradise in one, and then maybe deal w/ reincarnation and something else in another. Maybe the idea of living 'til you get it "right." Anyway, I think maybe I've rambled enough I really did like this, though I'm not sure you can tell it by this comment
    | Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by bentnotbroken | [ Reply to This ]
      All I can really say is Ive been there myself... And I found that what I needed wasnt religion telling me what or who to believe in, but I simply needed faith in myself. You gotta live life doing what you feel is right. I do love the simplicity and straightfoward nature of the piece...especially the end in which you say you have to work hard on your life because its the only one you have...Thats such a positive thought it takes any negativity in the piece and throws it out the window.good work...and just think your not alone in this feeling-Mirandir
    | Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by Mithrandir | [ Reply to This ]
      "Poems are meant to be art.. and inspiring
    not loads of baggage" - Ari (a great friend of mine) Ya know, I did go out and tried to make sense of your words like I said. But mangling the curtain of society in your behalf...is not worth it. You've got more to you than your hypocrisy, your blasphemy, your wise-acre live-for-the-day commentaries. Done.
    | Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
      "Oh yeah, man... making a statement to the world. You must feel proud for writing such a thoughtful poem. Its utterly... tactful.

    Look. Apparently, you think this is all there is in the world. Hey, i won't kill you for that. But I feel sorry for you. Whats it like knowing that every day you have nothing to live for- except to be an animal, living on instincts?

    You think there's no true good, no final truth? Guess what- there is. Go ahead, work hard in life. But keep on asking yourself every day 'why?'. Do you think that we came from stardust and randomness? Well, it may be stardust, but its not random.

    You have been given a gift. Life, poetry... insight, maybe. Its sad to see you squander it. Cuz, believe me. There is peace, there is paridise. I've seen it.

    I wish you would too." - ARI

    (Again, that was my friend).
    | Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
      well the average person has 76 (or something like that) years to live. i dont believe in any form of afterlife so all i gots my 76 years. thats the only time i got. i cant stick in another quarter and try again. when i get my gameover thats it. so im going to try to do good with my life. thats what im trying to say. i only got one life so balls to everyone else im gona live it.
    | Posted on 2004-08-24 00:00:00 | by nameless_nobody | [ Reply to This ]


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