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    dots Submission Name: Matchesdots
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    Author: AtrophyEmpathos
    ASL Info:    19 M California
    Elite Ratio:    4.39 - 45/55/29
    Words: 241
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 1079
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1717



    Description:
       Wordy, metaphorical, and inconclusive. Sometimes I hate myself.


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    dotsMatchesdots
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    A scratch breaks the silence;
    sulfur and smoke diffuse as
    Fire consumes the air,
    Chasing darkness,
    frantic shadows.
    Smoky mirrors reveal no image
    but refract the light in broken rays.

    Thick ground, soft and wet
    Always pulling,
    slowly swallowing,
    as one foot defiantly seeks
    another clumsy step.
    It is the way that
    Always was,
    Always is,

    Darkness.

    Another scratch, as the
    folded box slowly dwindles,
    Slowly, but surely as
    minutes turn to hours -
    Suddenly, as the rainy
    and the starry nights
    have turned to years.

    Pathways carry
    hopeful wanderers onto
    Hardened ground,
    Marked by dusty signs bearing
    a thousand synonyms for
    ’Salvation.’

    Difficult to see at first that
    All the ways wind
    Slowly down
    trodden and bowed into the earth
    trenches that will in time
    Wall away other paths.

    Who is a man?
    Which path does he take and
    How will he decide to trust?
    does it matter even
    if the choice is wrong?
    should he study, carefully,
    in the flickering light?
    or to listen, intently,
    to all the sounds of the night?

    If the strong and the weak,
    the loving and the hateful,
    those who struggle
    and those who succumb,
    Walkers of the path,
    and those who make their own -
    If everyone burns out
    And sinks down
    Eventually…
    Who is a man?

    If he makes the wrong choice will it matter?




    Submitted on 2004-08-25 04:11:21     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I thought that said so much! It said something for me, that I could never find how to put it into words, it's just so amazing that you were able to, and I find it, WOW. It was really awsome to be able to read that, and I might be young in age, but I know when something is good as hell, and damn, that's good as HELL!

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    | Posted on 2004-08-25 00:00:00 | by Monkey | [ Reply to This ]


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