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    dots Submission Name: Extinguishing of firedots
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    Author: slybee22
    ASL Info:    20
    Elite Ratio:    5.59 - 93/64/27
    Words: 206
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
    Total Views: 312
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1128



    Description:
        It is a confession of the worst crime one can commit against ones self.
    The crime of telling the heart not to love , and breaking it yourself.


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    dotsExtinguishing of firedots
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    I have fallen many times.

    Many times I have held my tongue.

    I have taken an oath and it is the reason I still breathe, I cannot throw that away.

    Still, not having you threatens to drive me insane.

    You truly do not know what you do to me. Do you?

    Am I that good at not letting my true feelings show?

    I'm I that cold?

    Sometimes I have myself convinced, I bye into my own lies, while inside my soul dies.

    You have set something in me blaze. Anyways it cannot be I made sure of that you see.

    This is my destiny ascension dose not include you see or rather you don't see.

    Still my soul fights for you luckily you don't know my heart true, I'll soon escape you

    still something in me burns for you.

    My heart fights for you, but my mind will never let that be.

    It the ancient battle, the Id Vs the ego, Inside I am at war, this war my heart cannot win , for I shal extinguish
    this fire.





    Submitted on 2004-08-25 13:16:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Having a relationship is very important in life

    I can tell from your writing that your longing for someone to help you erase all the negativity that surronds you
    Do not think you have to find a soulmate for that purpose love will come to you just give it time
    In the mean time look to friends and family to help you overcome lifes obstacles
    Trust me its a relationship much deeper then a relationship based on sex

    Take Care and keep in touch please
    Ron
    And again thank you for your comments
    Comments like yours help me to grow as a writer
    Thank You
    | Posted on 2005-11-01 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      thanx for your comments not everybody likes my writing style it works for me many times over i view my comments by their writes and comments no worries maybe you will enjoy and understand the next one
    anyways nice write you posted i read a couple some good some ok but i'm not a critique but i understand all that i read
    thanx again sandman
    | Posted on 2005-07-21 00:00:00 | by sandman | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh I can relate. I wouldn't be with my boyfriend if I hadn't defied my oath never to love again...so I guess you can forgive the weakness if the end justifies the means (As it were). Sometimes it takes more strength to open your heart again...than to keep it safe...Maybe your heart should win...
    | Posted on 2004-08-25 00:00:00 | by marysunshine | [ Reply to This ]



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