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    dots Submission Name: Oasisdots

    Author: solitary_cross
    ASL Info:    19/female/Philippines
    Elite Ratio:    3.4 - 92/107/24
    Words: 163
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 868
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       It is about going through the difficulties of life.

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    As I walk along the sands of time
    A never-ending journey awaits me
    Not knowing where my fate leads
    I urge myself to carry on

    Each step I take is punishment
    My feet burning because of the heat
    Making it more difficult for me
    To reach this endless trail

    Coming across the sandstorm
    I forcefully walk against the tide
    But slowly it envelops me
    Fogging my sense of direction

    Confusion inundates my mind
    Uncertainties in my soul
    Weariness of the heart
    I think I canít go on

    With a sudden outburst
    I collapse in the midst of the dunes
    Struggling myself to outlive
    This vicious cycle of life

    The windows of hope opens
    And at last I saw the light
    A luminous hand offers itself
    To kindle the strength from within

    Finally I arrive at the Elysium
    With glints of emeralds and sapphires
    Pacifying all my doubts and fears
    I submit to my final revelation

    Submitted on 2004-08-26 07:43:59     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      There's no guessing for me at the point of the luminous hand that this is about finding spiritual wealth and accepting one's destiny. The images you drawn of your walk across the desert are simple and very real, I can see you struggling against the wind and sands. This theme is the one every main character does battle with, something is out of reach, a goal, or tragedy to fight, so the message, of course, is universal. Very well done, I enjoyed it immensely.
    Thanks for sharing,
    | Posted on 2004-11-30 00:00:00 | by nansofast | [ Reply to This ]
      Finally I arrive at the Elysium
    With glints of emeralds and sapphires
    Pacifying all my doubts and fears
    I submit to my final revelation

    Was your final revelation to accept your life as it is and move on?
    | Posted on 2004-09-25 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]
      Beautiful! I read this and can see times when i feel the same way. I would not make any changes. I like it how it is. I definetly get a feeling of searching, and being lost. But finally seeing the end no matter what the end may be.
    | Posted on 2004-08-26 00:00:00 | by Kapone | [ Reply to This ]

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