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    dots Submission Name: One Year Laterdots
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    Author: Ensult
    ASL Info:    19/Male/New York
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 115/114/31
    Words: 162
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 1085
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    Description:
        This is just a poem that describes my relationship with my ex. It's like If i look back at how we were one year ago, it's like things were completely different. That why this poem is titled one year later.


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    dotsOne Year Laterdots
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    In only a short amount of time I experienced heaven
    I tasted love and slept with its weapon
    I honored her every step and plentiful grace
    Woke up every morning just to see her face
    One year later and her love is no more
    Now i cry so much that my eyes are sore
    All I wanted was to last forever
    One year later and were not even together
    My heart was completely open and now shes gone
    The truth is that I was mislead and cheated on
    Who could of known what she was lying
    With this much pain at heart Id rather be dying
    Her mind and smile were the only things i charished
    Here I cry alone hurt and embarrassed
    My only intentions were to keep her happy
    Now shes with a new man and they hooked up gladly
    A 17 year old girl and a 27 year old waiter
    Here I stand alone and crying one year later




    Submitted on 2004-08-26 21:23:24     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Ahhh...this was a really heartfelt piece, and I hope your tears are no more...The only thing I found distracting was your lack of punctuation...EX: alone, hurt and embarrased...If you clean it up a little you would have an excellent piece...B
    | Posted on 2004-08-26 00:00:00 | by bluepifany | [ Reply to This ]


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