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    dots Submission Name: Catch My Tearsdots

    Author: Ensult
    ASL Info:    19/Male/New York
    Elite Ratio:    3.01 - 115/114/31
    Words: 245
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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       This is just a poem that I was starting and was really deciding if it's good or not. It just speaks about 2 things in my life that have really changed me in a major way. Let me know if you like it or not and tell me if you would like me to continue with it. Please give me all the advice you can.

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    dotsCatch My Tearsdots

    I canít write because i fear that my mind will start twirlin
    Where do i begin my fucked up brother or my girlfriend
    They each challenged me in life and i almost quit
    gave me a first hand view of what itís like to be shit
    To talk about my bro would mean to talk relentless
    But the pain in my heart that I feel is endless
    To mention my ex would only bring back the scars
    Iím at home while she fuckin in the back of some cars
    Iíll write until my heart skips a beat and tears start to drop
    Melvin will only get drunk and try to threaten my pops
    Iíll write until her scars start to form into scabs
    Wit my lucky ass iím surprised I didnít end up wit crabs
    I could talk about them both until my heart is drained
    Two buckets fill of tears and no relief of the pain
    She was my everything in life all the way from the start
    Then she stole everything from me even my heart
    He was suppossed to back me up and show protection
    Instead he ended up being the most deadliest weapon
    How do you begin a story only filled with pain
    Just Pour your heart out and follow the rain.

    Iíll take you back into the day where i was his man
    the first gun held to my head was in the palm of his hand

    Submitted on 2004-08-26 21:27:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Great, just let it all out... and have a good cry sometimes it just makes you feel better... But such pain in a brilliant youth such as u shouldn't be needed I hope you find some happiness soon...
    | Posted on 2004-08-26 00:00:00 | by Jakirina | [ Reply to This ]

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