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    dots Submission Name: Bashfuldots
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    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Prose/Misc
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    Description:
       This is about another of my boyfriend's nieces, Taylor. She's Paige's fraternal twin (the subject of Like and Angel in an Old Bible). They are polar opposites in personality but equally sweet and lovely.


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    You're the bashful one
    with the low-key charm and sweetness of vanilla
    in a chocolate world
    sneaking in smiles
    when you think no one is looking
    blushing when you realize someone is,
    but the most graceful beauty
    sings in lieu of shouting.




    Submitted on 2004-08-27 03:58:06     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      awwww... she sounds completely adorable! vanilla in a chocolate world is such a GORGEOUS image! and the last line is beautiful! she really does sound like a wee cutie!
    | Posted on 2004-08-27 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      that's sweet. Someone's Epiphany is right the vanilla image is gorgeous. I found the pic I told you about again. go to:
    www.deviantart.com/deviation/9784959/
    it fits to your poems. a very well done piece. how many nieces does Paul have??
    | Posted on 2004-08-27 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      sweet. i love the last line, "the most graceful beauty/Sings in lieu of shouting." ain't it the truth? I also like "vanilla/In a chocolate world." this is really a beautiful image of this sweet little girl. oh, and i LOVE that cat you're sitting with up there! i've seen it before, and i just wanna rub her belly (not yours! well,.. lol!). great poem and great pic!
    | Posted on 2004-08-27 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]
      oh i love this one Amy..she sounds like a very special little girl. loved the vanilla/chocolate metaphor.. it reminded me of tori amos

    the way you've described her makes her sound angelic.. this is a really beautiful poem.
    | Posted on 2004-08-27 00:00:00 | by girlinthephoto | [ Reply to This ]
      very nice poem. Children are such inspirational subjects to write about.

    i really like the image of graceful beaty singing in lieu of shouting. that reminds me of a great movie (i can't remmeber the name) where this young woman was so shy and never talked, but boy could she ever sing!
    | Posted on 2004-08-27 00:00:00 | by jdinning67 | [ Reply to This ]
      Is tailor pointy like a Hershey's Hug?
    Just kidding.
    What can I say?
    Cute kid.
    You know theres an advantage to being Bashful.
    People are led to believe you are modest, when you can get away without being that way.

    MyX
    | Posted on 2004-08-28 00:00:00 | by MyX | [ Reply to This ]


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