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    dots Submission Name: Aspiration #4 - Rewritedots
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    Author: Syndl
    ASL Info:    28/F/NC
    Elite Ratio:    5.02 - 56/55/19
    Words: 94
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    Description:
       Just a rewrite from prose to poetry with a few word changes. I considered expanding but I liked it short.

    Feel free to give any and all opinions...


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    dotsAspiration #4 - Rewritedots
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    To be but a dream in the mind of a child.
    Romping through imagined notions and realms,
    Ever twisting and changing to both the delight
    And the horror of the mind.

    Darkness flitters to golden sunshine at whim,
    A lollipop, a snake, an old, weathered oak
    An amber field or the cottony clouds atop a blue veined sky.

    To know that my visions and whispered promises will be
    Forever remembered or instantly forgotten.
    To be but a dream in the mind of a child.




    Submitted on 2004-08-27 16:28:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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