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    dots Submission Name: Surreal Listdots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       This was a writing exercise. The idea was to make a list that is completely surreal. It's not supposed to make sense.

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    One guard dog too old and tired to bark.

    Two idealistic dancing robots who are short on skill but long on daring.

    Three cups of sweet soup made from pansies, honey, cinnamon, and cream.

    Four American tourists with faces more ironic than Wallace Stevens eating a vanilla cone at Versailles.

    Five nightsticks of carved jade in the shape of slender elephants with diamond eyes and golden trunks that are used to squish ants.

    Submitted on 2004-08-29 16:56:50     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Reminds me of cowboy talk. Doesn't make sense to most, but they're so sincere in their voice you just gotta believe him. Oh, hello again... It's been some time; a month or so, maybe. As I suspected you haven't grown dull yet.
    | Posted on 2004-12-24 00:00:00 | by JR Hoodlum | [ Reply to This ]
      yea this reminds me of salvador dali! he was really like a huge idealistic...this is pretty cool...thta would be pretty cool if it was like painted or something...byw did you win that poetry contest thing you were talking about like a month or 2 ago???
    | Posted on 2004-09-26 00:00:00 | by Rhaine | [ Reply to This ]
      One guard dog too old and tired to bark.

    Two idealistic dancing robots who are short on skill but long on daring.

    Three cups of sweet soup made from pansies, honey, cinnamon, and cream

    I liked these lines because it is true that the name of the poem matched the mix match of contents within it with a blazing cold fire...okay my demonstration of trying to make a list didn't work but yours was intriguing and I agree with Dan!
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]
      hahahahahahaha. man. this was awesome. it had not much of a point, but to be as random as possible. although i loved the line "Four American tourists with faces more ironic that Wallace Stevens eating a vanilla cone at Versailles." that one was awesome. but maybe you should give this one a plot or something that connects all these interesting contemplations into one meaningful poem.
    | Posted on 2004-08-29 00:00:00 | by all the english boys | [ Reply to This ]

    what i liked about this (and you may or may not have meant this), was that each line hit things that seemed so preposterous.

    - a guard dog that won't bark
    - a daring, but incapable robot
    - American tourists often to me seem so
    - a diamond and jade stick to squish ants

    Sweet soup was the only thing that didn't seem preposterous.
    | Posted on 2004-08-29 00:00:00 | by jdinning67 | [ Reply to This ]
      lol. nice list. I like how you always got longer with each item. everyone on its own is a great surrealistic scene you've described. put everything together, paint it on a canvas and you've got a surreal painting.
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by eve1684 | [ Reply to This ]
      this put a smile on a my face this sleepy monday morning. i liked the five nighsticks best. you've got a mighty creative brain there, amy! the play on Surreal(ist) is something i'd certainly never think of. you weirdo, you! and i mean that in a great way!
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by magnicat | [ Reply to This ]

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