Give Me Your All -------------------------------------------
I'm jaded now whatever that means
by sharing these things
I rip my heart out
it's worth my time
whatever that means...
hard to see up
my neck feels stiff until I wake up
the orange i choked
and back to my neck
it's worth my time
whatever that means....so
share with me
cause i need it right now
let me see your insides
or write me off
cause I'd rather starve now
if you won't open up
give it to me
give me all... whatever you want
it's never been me
to want this much from you
I can see
it tears me up
I am sorry, but your own words describe my reaction to the poem best; "whatever that means..." I couldn't really find a handle to get a grip on what you meant by this. And yes, I read it again, no luck.
I'm confused about what your poem means. I am reading it and I think I'm getting the wrong message or maybe I am just reading too far into it and the message is just on the surface and I am missing it by tooking for somthing that just is not there. any ways Your poem confuses me very much.
Oh ANGIE! I lovd this just as much as the others...hmmmmm...I wonder who this might be about??? *cough*Ed*cough*cough* or maybe MY ex???? lol Lovely write as usual and I love how you keep echoing the "whatever that means" line...it just seems so honest that way.
this is a great write, and i really enjoyed reading it...i can really feel the emotion, the longing behind it...this work has a good flow to it and a great word usage...i think that if you added a stanza or two to it that it would make a great song...i can really relate to this, trying to get someone to open up and they won't and pushing them only make sit worse...great job
It's hard to breathe when you've just poured your heart out to someone and they close up even further, isn't it? I hate that feeling. It's like swallowing an orange. Whole. I think I understand where you're coming from, and I agree with your point of view if we're on the same page. Good write, easy read. Thanks for opening up. -Archadya
I really love this...it reminds me of something or someone. You really create a character with this poem- someone speaking these words to me, and I can feel their entire presence and persona behind them. I love it when you get a lot from a poem
i must say that i really like this peice of yours.It makes me think of my ex and me.. i would open up and he wouldnt care or nething.. i really really like it.. keep up the good work.. u brought back memories for me :D