I really like the language you used here, the metaphors of the weather are particularly good but there are a few typos, so I suggest to read through to check for those. Nothing else really to say. Nice work.
Wheeeeeee... you took the weather metaphor farther than most people. That was pretty awesome. I like how at the end, it almost looks like The End. But I guess the capital "E" is supposed to show how it really is the end of all the waiting?