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    dots Submission Name: Just Waitingdots
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    Author: Emerging Soul
    ASL Info:    48/VERY female/Wisconsin
    Elite Ratio:    4.36 - 1240/1114/244
    Words: 89
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsJust Waitingdots
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    Gray clouds haunt my memories

    Like threatening thunderstorms

    Raining upon my soul

    Flashes of thoughts

    Run across my mind

    Like lightening

    There one second and then gone

    Leaving behind only the image of the light

    When you close your eyes

    Impulses scattering around

    Like windblown debris

    I scarce can withstand the force

    Trying hard

    Just to hold on

    To where I stand

    Just waiting

    For the rain

    To End





    Submitted on 2004-08-30 14:49:23     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I really like the language you used here, the metaphors of the weather are particularly good but there are a few typos, so I suggest to read through to check for those. Nothing else really to say. Nice work.
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      Wheeeeeee... you took the weather metaphor farther than most people. That was pretty awesome. I like how at the end, it almost looks like The End. But I guess the capital "E" is supposed to show how it really is the end of all the waiting?

    -emo.
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]


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