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    dots Submission Name: Sweet Nothingdots
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    Author: emo-tastic
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    Words: 77
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    dotsSweet Nothingdots
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    She was crushed
    by the force of gravity
    that comes with
    waking up each day.

    Smile softly
    sweet nothing
    for the earth is on your side.

    Fortunately forgotten
    by an eternity of waiting
    she lived her life
    with unreleased passion.

    Until the contained
    came out to greet her
    they embraced
    and she was shunned.

    Smile softly
    sweet nothing
    for the earth is on your side

    yet the world stays hidden.




    Submitted on 2004-08-30 15:17:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      very sweet nothing! Its difficult to write a poem this powerful to me and yet I still have no clue what it's about, or maybe it's just about nothing?
    | Posted on 2004-10-21 00:00:00 | by StarAcabar | [ Reply to This ]
      Woah, I was loving this through and through, I think it would make a great song with a few added touched but I think its great nonetheless. There's nothing really I can change but I'd certainly add some more to it if I had written this piece.
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]
      it is a very seious poem that comes across to me as being something of a riddle.even if my interpretation is inaccurate,you have succeeded in writing a very interesting poem.
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by sickly | [ Reply to This ]
      I also agree with JimweiZERO, I think this would make an excellent song. I thought this was about a girl/woman who hides the passionate, loving side of her from the world. Always hiding from the world when in the end the world is on her side but hidden. If that makes any sense at all! :) I liked this. Good job!
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]


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