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    dots Submission Name: un wanteddots
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    Author: natasha
    ASL Info:    15/f/brampton
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 113/159/52
    Words: 250
    Class/Type: Story/Depressed
    Total Views: 1566
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    Bytes: 1298



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    She loves to guys and is happy with both. Scarred to fall fail cry and break down. She loves one guy who is so perfected and careing but is only as friend is distance. The Other shes been with b4 and still likes him. But is scarred to fall into the same bull shit that came between them agian.Shes lost confussed scared alone and heart broken. Sits in her room writes all day long and gets put down. Nothing hurts more then the things she loves gets thrown back in her face. She talks to mr perfected and loves talking to him about everything... he asked her to marry him as a friendly joke as friends.. she accepted. and felt soo happy. The nexted day lead to heart ake and pain when she told the other that shed been with b4 she cant keep messing around and he said he didnt care and didnt like her anyways. She cryed. so sad that mr perfected wasnt on to confert her. Shes sad.. Mr perfects only a friend and she thinks thats all they'll ever be. She likes him but lives not close enough to him... she sits and wonders. why do i feel like this? why do i feel sad,happy,loved,scarred, but all in the end shes unwated. loving the unlovable, wanting the un possible. she will forever never understand why the worlds they way it is and why shes unwated by the ppl she loves. (to be contuied)




    Submitted on 2004-08-30 20:02:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      dear natasha, i think u might be giving a little too much of yoursefl and not enough of your dreams. maybe you can try writting how you would liek the story to end. you are in love, what things do you want to happen? what kind of things do u want to hear from mr. perfect? what can he do to show you that you ARE love? you are not limilted by anything except yourself! variety is the spice of life... ;)
    | Posted on 2004-08-31 00:00:00 | by ibelikeso | [ Reply to This ]
      i'm sorry, but you have to fix the spelling and the grammar because it's really hard for me to read. i couldn't get past the first several lines. fix that and i'll read it again.
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by Delirium | [ Reply to This ]


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