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    dots Submission Name: poisondots
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    Author: ariadne
    Elite Ratio:    4.11 - 99/85/26
    Words: 91
    Class/Type: Poetry/
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    dotspoisondots
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    You're like this poison
    I once took
    It coursed through me
    and I shook

    wait for it to
    reach my brain
    my heart to stop
    my hand to stay

    It did not work
    fast enough
    I took a knife
    made it up

    And you kill me
    faster than
    anything I've
    ever taken

    if you want me
    to confess to
    everything I've
    been with you

    then let this poison
    I'm drinking
    course through my veins
    and take me




    Submitted on 2004-08-30 20:06:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You're saying you once took poison? I'm like poison, and let you take me/ or the bottle
    ? I like it but I'm confused about what or who is the poison. unlike six-grey, I'll be poison free tonight, thank you very much.
    | Posted on 2004-11-18 00:00:00 | by Al | [ Reply to This ]
      I want some of that poison- you make it sound so good! I kno they say thys is a lame comment to make but- thys has a beautiful flow. Itís so [censored]iní pretty!
    | Posted on 2004-11-04 00:00:00 | by Six_Grey | [ Reply to This ]
      good but i think these would make better lyrics than a poem... painfull words, this is a darkish poem that really makes you think... what am i doing to myself? good write
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by GhiHaD | [ Reply to This ]


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