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    dots Submission Name: La Jolladots

    Author: cuddledumplin
    ASL Info:    36/ f/UK
    Elite Ratio:    4.08 - 6269/5927/526
    Words: 69
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsLa Jolladots

    I left you in La Jolla;
    I had this sinking feeling.
    and you drug me deeper still.
    I couldn't cry away my sadness:
    Couldn't fight away my anger...
    I feel like a child for running away:
    I feel like a saint for leaving you unscathed.
    Maybe that waitress (that couldn't wait)
    saved you from the captive hell
    we made together,
    but we called it making love.

    Submitted on 2004-02-22 04:04:04     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Ooooh, now this I like. It's incredible, and that last line... "But we called it making love." so sudden and complete a reversal. Beautiful. Sad, very sad, but very well crafted. <><
    | Posted on 2004-03-22 00:00:00 | by WorththeWait | [ Reply to This ]
    Spot on and the use of 'drug me deeper' conveys emotions nearing the lowest ebb but you seem to have got down there almost without knowing...
    Tell us how you felt a week later...
    | Posted on 2004-02-22 00:00:00 | by Awkward | [ Reply to This ]

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