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    dots Submission Name: Deceptiondots
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    Author: GhiHaD
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 46/64/24
    Words: 101
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Misc
    Total Views: 795
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    Bytes: 802



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    dotsDeceptiondots
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    The flowers are bleeding
    Wild dogs are seething
    Fields on fire
    You think im a liar
    You think im a liar

    Final thoughts of perception
    Seeing new dimensions
    Greed and deception
    What do ya reckon?
    What do ya reckon?

    (instrumental)

    COME ON!!

    (instrumental)

    Fantastic lovers
    Under the covers
    Kicking in the door
    My heart's on the floor
    My heart's on the floor

    She knows i'm inside
    Better run and hide
    Theres gonna be a crime
    For the very first time
    THERES GONNA BE A CRIME!

    (instrumental)

    ALRIGHT!!
    COME ON!!

    (instrumental)





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    ||| Comments |||
      Its no good putting music behind lyrics for yourself because usually the piece was written for a completely different stlye. I guess you've grasped the rock aspect of things will all the alrights and come ons, but that's not a bad point in this case. I think it would make a great song personally as mine are all too complicated and I can't put music to them, whereas something like this could be worked on very easily. (Something to consider.)
    | Posted on 2004-08-31 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]


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