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    dots Submission Name: Possesiondots
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    Author: GhiHaD
    ASL Info:    22/Male/Australia
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 46/64/24
    Words: 58
    Class/Type: Poetry/Angry
    Total Views: 834
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 407



    Description:
       now if you aren't fond of swear words please don't read this poem....


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    dotsPossesiondots
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    Sit down
    Shut the fuck up
    This is my time

    You are mine
    Soul, mine
    This pitiful shell called the physical, mine

    Shut the fuck up!

    Who are you?
    What the fuck are you?
    Do you even have a clue?

    MINE!

    Sinister dispositions and fluctuating hate

    You foul serpent
    You are mine




    Submitted on 2004-08-30 21:07:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      well this has crude but concise poem. I would work on your wording and getting more out there. But on the brighter side is see that you are desrcibing what Possesion really is and what the emotion really would be thinking.
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by titan | [ Reply to This ]
      love turn to hate easliy doesn't it. i don't mind swear words. i find this Okay. not bad, but not great. so good i should think. it has potential, but at this point it is just a vent. go into desribing this person that is your a little bit more. and then it will be conciderable better.

    Milo Stills
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]


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