well this has crude but concise poem. I would work on your wording and getting more out there. But on the brighter side is see that you are desrcibing what Possesion really is and what the emotion really would be thinking.
love turn to hate easliy doesn't it. i don't mind swear words. i find this Okay. not bad, but not great. so good i should think. it has potential, but at this point it is just a vent. go into desribing this person that is your a little bit more. and then it will be conciderable better.