Possesion by GhiHaD

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Submission Name: Possesion dots

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Author:	GhiHaD
ASL Info:	22/Male/Australia
Elite Ratio:	2.84 - 46/64/24
Words:	58

Class/Type:	Poetry/Angry
Total Views:	834
Average Vote:	No vote yet.
Bytes:	407

Description:
now if you aren't fond of swear words please don't read this poem....

Possesion dots

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Sit down
Shut the fuck up
This is my time

You are mine
Soul, mine
This pitiful shell called the physical, mine

Shut the fuck up!

Who are you?
What the fuck are you?
Do you even have a clue?

MINE!

Sinister dispositions and fluctuating hate

You foul serpent
You are mine

Submitted on 2004-08-30 21:07:05 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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well this has crude but concise poem. I would work on your wording and getting more out there. But on the brighter side is see that you are desrcibing what Possesion really is and what the emotion really would be thinking.
| Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by titan | [ Reply to This ]
love turn to hate easliy doesn't it. i don't mind swear words. i find this Okay. not bad, but not great. so good i should think. it has potential, but at this point it is just a vent. go into desribing this person that is your a little bit more. and then it will be conciderable better.

Milo Stills
| Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by milo stills | [ Reply to This ]

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Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3 It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

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