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    dots Submission Name: One Phrasedots
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    Author: Linz
    ASL Info:    24/f/Ne
    Elite Ratio:    2.52 - 86/118/44
    Words: 167
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 790
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    Bytes: 971



    Description:
       This is something I wrote for my boyfriend on our way home from our vacation.


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    dotsOne Phrasedots
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    Not afraid to be who I am,
    Not afraid to say whats on my mind
    Except when it comes to you.
    Theres things I want to tell you
    but they never seem to come out!
    Only stupid, meaningless shit comes out
    So I shut my mouth
    and think of what I wanted to say
    then try to figure out the perfect way
    to let you know how much I care,
    How much I love you, how much
    I's miss you if you were gone
    How much I need you here with me
    or how crazy I'd so if I lost you.

    Only if there was a work or phrase
    that would say it all
    full of meaning,
    full of my hearts feelings
    I'd say it everyday
    So you wouldn't forget
    The closest thing to say it all
    doesn't even come close
    But I say it everyday
    hoping you'll remember or realize
    all thats true
    all because I love You!




    Submitted on 2004-08-30 22:49:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      The closest thing to say it all
    doesn't even come close
    But I say it everyday
    hoping you'll remember or realize
    all thats true
    all because I love You!

    I wish I could say these things to my boyfriend's face or even read them to him...but I'd probably send them in the mail I would be so scared
    | Posted on 2004-08-30 00:00:00 | by Brwnsknsam05 | [ Reply to This ]


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