Another one of your dark-ironic, acid pieces in the fashion we all know and love. As usual, I enjoyed the imagery very much as well as the 'stretched' emotions. The last line somehow doesn't fit the rest though...might be the 'and' that bothers me alittle but that's all really.
very original, a great thought but unfortunately it doesn't work. if it would I would change my batteries immediately. I like the last line but I would change the "and" to "I'd". cause with "and" your sentence feels somehow incomplete, at least for me. anyway a really good poem.
i really like this idea its awesome and quite orignal...the last line could of been left off...i just find it to come off cheesy and ruins the write but thats just my opinion sooo...but as usual you've said so much with few words...smiles ange