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    dots Submission Name: somethings missing. (wont try)dots

    Author: natasha
    ASL Info:    15/f/brampton
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 113/159/52
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Misc/Depressed
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       i like to make things up once in a whilke and i was listening to eveanessence and yea.. felt dark and alone and with the way i feel i wrote this... u may not like it but meh everyone doesnt have to like everything. but let me know what u think.. thanks

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    dotssomethings missing. (wont try)dots

    something is missing...
    im alone while your walking free.
    even thought i would die to know u love me
    i know you wont try for me..

    I know what you think to ur self.
    that im no one , nothing, a waste of ur time..

    your harshful words hurt me like a knife.
    you wont try for me i know that for sure.


    to dream of you hurts even more when all i want is for you to love me...
    I lie there and a wait till we meet agian..
    but even then you wont try for me..

    isnt something missing? arent you missing me?
    it wont matter. your not here.

    Submitted on 2004-08-31 18:45:46     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ok where to start? the way you arranged every line was great. yet the last line was out of nowhere. the way you wrote...

    isnt something missing? arent you missing me?

    that one line brought the whole poem together. and those are the kind of words that stay in my mind. meaning i will remmeber your poem and you.
    | Posted on 2004-09-04 00:00:00 | by ibelikeso | [ Reply to This ]

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