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    Author: natasha
    ASL Info:    15/f/brampton
    Elite Ratio:    2.55 - 113/159/52
    Words: 154
    Class/Type: Misc/Angry
    Total Views: 895
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 890



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       this is about me. im mad. but happy. kinda confussing.. but yet... i dont know what it should be.


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    every day i hear the same..
    grow up,
    give up,
    you wont make it.
    how can i still live on....

    im useless..
    everyday its all the same.
    but here i am ...

    happy, writeing, speaking hearing.
    i dont care what people think. I dont care
    if i die today. Im useless.

    I write i cry im normal like u..
    but not in everyway..
    im moody lazzy
    and yet why should you care.

    you wont give me the time and day, i sit and i try.
    your words cut in like knifes..
    I CANY PLEASE YOU!!!...
    but im trying....
    Love me , hate me , use me , killl me.
    I still wont be happy...

    Im me.. and im happy with how i am...
    ACCEPTED ME FOR ME:
    no one else.. im just a shawdow on your shelf.

    simply ignored.




    Submitted on 2004-08-31 18:51:38     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      That sucks man, and i know it does cause well thats my life too, the constant pressures and hatered. Good job, all you need to do is fix the errors.
    | Posted on 2004-09-02 00:00:00 | by Teh Green Fish | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm... fix the grammatical errors and this could be awesome. It's your same stream-of-conciousness style, but you finally formatted it properly. Awesome job and way to improve.

    -emo.
    | Posted on 2004-08-31 00:00:00 | by emo-tastic | [ Reply to This ]


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