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    dots Submission Name: True Lovedots
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    Author: Skinwalker
    Elite Ratio:    2.62 - 36/57/28
    Words: 236
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 736
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    Description:
       A love poem...a change of events


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    dotsTrue Lovedots
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    I take you in my arms,
    I hold you gently.
    My lips press to yours.
    My heart belongs to you.

    I awoke in alarm.
    You I couldnt see.
    Things went worse.
    How could I lose?

    My heart froze
    my eyes burned
    furiously I raged
    Beserke I became.

    I loved but did lose.
    A leason learned.
    My thoughts were dazed.
    I can't remember your name.

    Why'd they take you from me?
    What did I do to deserve this?
    My heart broken I resumed
    my pitiful life wishing for your face.

    I roll over to try and find, to see
    your eyes and your lips.
    For years, our memories loomed.
    Then I left the race.

    The years passed and I waited,
    to see you again in life or death.
    I hold my cane and stare out the window.
    I wish you would come home.

    My face has become dated,
    my body doesn't work at the best.
    My iron lung breathes for me now.
    I cry as I wait for you alone.

    Love transcends Life and Death,
    Time and Memory has passed.
    I wish to be able to grasp
    you in my arms and know all is right.

    My body grew cold, my soul left.
    I am free from my tomb at last.
    I find you smiling in my grasp.
    You waited for me in Heaven and all is right.




    Submitted on 2004-08-31 18:54:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      wow i really like this peice that u made. its amazing. ur talented. never give up writeing. never stop. i really like this.
    | Posted on 2004-08-31 00:00:00 | by natasha | [ Reply to This ]
      Wow, at first I thought she left you for someone else, but then I realize that she died. Good job, keep it up. I liked it a lot. To be sincere, it doesn't rhyme that good but, it is easy to read and the message makes up for it.
    | Posted on 2004-08-31 00:00:00 | by April0414 | [ Reply to This ]


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