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    dots Submission Name: In Your Armsdots
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    Author: April0414
    ASL Info:    16/f/pr
    Elite Ratio:    4.68 - 94/64/15
    Words: 123
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
    Total Views: 882
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    Bytes: 754



    Description:
       This poem is about when you feel sad and there's nothing that anyone could tell you to cheer you up, you just need someone to hold you really tight and stay there. Thanks for reading it in advance!


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    dotsIn Your Armsdots
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    Let me lean on your shoulder
    and shut my eyes tightly
    for you to just hold me
    and never let go
    is more than enough
    for my deep melancholy.

    Don't say anything because there are no words to console me
    and let's hear this silence,
    that says much more than words,
    sometimes all I need is your arms around me,
    while these tears run down my world.

    I just want to feel you here,
    just embrace me,
    dont move an inch,
    stay still, just hold me,
    let me cry away my sadness,
    just stay still and hug me
    all I need from you is
    to let me feel around me this human warmth,
    and suffer this pain away in your arms.




    Submitted on 2004-08-31 20:49:32     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i really can relate to this poem more, compared to "love is pain" and "caught up". it's as if my inner thoughts have been written down crystal clear in your poem. i think i'll have to show him this poem.

    Suzi
    | Posted on 2006-01-16 00:00:00 | by sushi wok | [ Reply to This ]
      this is so understandable. i screamed this at my boyfriend at our last fight becasue he just didt get it. he thoguht jokes would make it alright. he still doesnt get it. would yoyu mind if i showed him this, just so he gets it? i know in a way its stupid asking, but its your work, and i just want you to feel comfortable about it.
    hope you dont get thatr depressive feeling too much, because eventually it will probabbly just feel so depressive, that every thing stops.
    if you ever get afraid you will be that way, just tell me. im only just past 16, but ive already been in hospital for it, and i dont want any one else to have to suffer the way i did.
    just PM me if you want to talk.
    | Posted on 2005-03-23 00:00:00 | by eowyn | [ Reply to This ]
      wow, this reminds me of the troubles in my life. Unfortunately no one is there for me. so in deep longing for someone to "hold me", your poem strikes me with a parallel universe to you.
    | Posted on 2004-09-27 00:00:00 | by bluecrane | [ Reply to This ]
      day after day is all i can say. i wake this way i sleep this way. but i dont even have the arms to fall in to. they're around someone else. i'm totally with you on this one. nice job.
    | Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by Butterfly Bullets | [ Reply to This ]
      that is a feeling that most people can relate to. i know i have felt that way before. hope you feel better than you did when you wrote this. i don't think there is anything i would change about it.
    | Posted on 2004-08-31 00:00:00 | by Delirium | [ Reply to This ]
      im sorry if that is how you feel right now, but your poem is very good. it tells me what your exact feelings at the time you wrote this were and isnt that what all poets look for when they write.
    | Posted on 2004-08-31 00:00:00 | by titan | [ Reply to This ]


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