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    dots Submission Name: riding with chestnut now hemotominsdots
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    Author: all the english boys
    ASL Info:    15
    Elite Ratio:    2.76 - 173/239/46
    Words: 177
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nostalgia
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    dotsriding with chestnut now hemotominsdots
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    the chemicals slide so easy down my throat
    a backwards paranoia leaving us to the sky
    takes me back to when i was a little girl
    on a roach motel farm
    where the sunrise kept you squinting until the afternoon
    the wheat would sway with the acidic breeze
    the corn would never grow past my knees
    i used to hold hands with seth, as we swung down by the creek, now filled with waste from nearby industry
    hemotomins explode like the dawn past my baby blue curtains
    i have to get up, wake my little brother, and feed the chickens
    seth moved away that november
    and my little brother died of pnumonia that winter
    and my horse, chestnut love, went crazy and i had to shoot her myself
    remnants of my innocence shatter as the lifeless body falls to the floor
    i leave her to the barn rats, and my brother's puppies
    and then i jolt back to the street behind the furniture place
    someone's tongue in my mouth
    and dawn never seems like it will break




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