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    dots Submission Name: Fire Words for Flaming Heartsdots
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    Author: Butterfly Bullets
    ASL Info:    24/M/DE
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 188/257/24
    Words: 202
    Class/Type: Lyrics/
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    dotsFire Words for Flaming Heartsdots
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    In the hole where we left our hearts divided
    We run from the words scared of whatís been recited
    We are dead with precision and left with a decision
    That goes undecided

    Iíll find my way down so I can crawl back up to you
    Iíll find my way down and Iíll lose all my trust in you
    Iíll find my way down
    Forget what you heard
    Some things were left unsaid
    Some things were left unsaid

    Conversation is like drowning in the sand
    Head first, it always hurts when youíre not holding my hand
    We can mix the chemicals we can make a new love
    But this fake, will never take the place of what it was

    Iíll find my way down so I can crawl back up to you
    Iíll find my way down and Iíll lose all my trust in you
    Iíll find my way down
    Forget what you heard
    Some things were left unsaid
    Some things were left unsaid

    Never will never happen
    Even though time stands still
    We will never learn our lesson
    Even if itís me you have to kill

    Some things were left unsaid
    Some things were left unsaid




    Submitted on 2004-09-01 01:52:52     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Sometimes it is better to let it be, but sometimes we cannot simply do that. You must seek your own path, I guess, and use your heart and not your mind. Love is not found through logic, so we have found... I guess we always find our way back... for better or for worse... Virgil
    | Posted on 2004-11-23 00:00:00 | by Lip_Gloss_and_Black | [ Reply to This ]
      why this is good -

    it's exactly the reasons i've never gotten back with an ex - there was a reason we broke up in the first place, and even though it's comfortable and familiar, and love still lingers, it's a bad idea because of what was left unsaid.

    that and it was very cleverly written - i stumbled my way through this, not because it was hard to read, but because there was so much in every line that was "woah" with freshness - pieces involving love tend to get repetitive. tightly woven words and each line was a sucker punch for reality and how much it still bites, all these years after ben and ethan and winona made the phrase famous. great read, thanks for sharing.

    ~Blue
    | Posted on 2004-11-07 00:00:00 | by blueorchids | [ Reply to This ]
      You hooked the reader from the very beginning, all the way to the last line. That is key to lyrics because when they are put to music you need to hold the reader to the words, not just the music. You did a wonderful job on this and it definately hooked me.
    -blt
    | Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by borderlinetears | [ Reply to This ]
      wow .. i swear man ur talented. i know that it sucks when u break u and want to be friends. ive tryed with my recent ex and he just says he hates me.. when just not to long ago he loved me... its hard. one day hes my friend the nexyed hes not... anyways good piece i love it... maybe were all not meant to be friendswith our ex's.. i dont think i am
    | Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by natasha | [ Reply to This ]
      'Conversation is like drowning in the sand
    Head first, it always hurts when youíre not holding my hand
    We can mix the chemicals we can make a new love
    But this fake, will never take the place of what it was'

    this is so real and i dont get how you can capture this so accurately!? i think maybe we never do stop loving but just that our love takes ona different form and i guess when you hve a different form of love and try to make it what it used to be its always gonna be fake... and i think the beauty and simplicity of 'it always hurts when your not holding my hand' completely blew me away... i mean theres way huger reasons to feel hurt... you really must be a romantic one... good for you!
    | Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by Someones Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      Oh wow! Completely speechless throughout the whole few time I read this. Your words are so true in this case, its never happened to me I know of lot people who try what you've described. I don't understand the logic behind it because even though you're 'friends' you're never really gonna go the cinema or anything like friends are you? Just thoughts that came to me during this excellent piece of work. Please keep them coming like this!
    | Posted on 2004-09-01 00:00:00 | by JimweiZERO | [ Reply to This ]


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