Good Girls Don't Leave Us -------------------------------------------
Caress my throat before you dig in
Tell me that you love me again and again
Pull these bullets out one at a time
Don’t hurt me
Hold me close till the bitter end
Spin the revolver like a friend
Put the bullets back one at a time
Don’t hurt me
Raindrops fall like bodies
One by one in the street
Drowning like butterflies in the heat
Good girls don’t cry
Good girls don’t lie
Good girls don’t break our hearts
And leave us to die
Tonight
I’m not a fan of long goodbyes
Let’s make this quick just close your eyes
If you see the sun again I’ll be gone
Strum the strings around my heart
Cut the stitches around my scars
Put me in the front again all alone
Combust, burn up, fall in love
If that’s what you want for all of us
Raindrops fall like bodies
One by one in the street
Drowning like butterflies in the heat
Good girls don’t cry
Good girls don’t lie
Good girls don’t break our hearts
And leave us to die
Tonight
With every streak down the window pane
The raindrops seem to spell out your name
And everything’s gray
Everyday
I lust after your ending. Okay that was a thing to say... This is so sad and wonderful. I would so listen to it. I think I say that to all lyrics though... This was so sad. I just loved it. "Raindrops fall like bodies One by one in the street Drowning like butterflies in the heat Good girls don’t cry Good girls don’t lie Good girls don’t break our hearts And leave us to die Tonight"
Fantastic. The title pulled me in. The poem kept me there.
It all looks so grey, so... so... lost. I don't think others quite understand your poetry/lyrics (but then maybe I don't either... hmm...) The rain just hits so hard, and it never seems to stop. I hope you find some closure, although it will be a shame that no works like this will then be composed. Art at a price, eh? Virgil
though the rest of this way very good, this first line is the most intriguing to me for uncalled for and somewhat bloodthirsty reasons:
Caress my throat before you dig in
it puts me in mind of mothers who kill their children - do they smooth flyaway hairs from their brows and smile comfortingly before they say, "this won't hurt a bit, mommy loves you" and cover their small, trusting faces with painstakingly embroidered pillows? and husbands who kill their wives - do they make love to them, slowly and the way a woman truly likes it, listening to everything she sighs and screams in the throes of passion and whispers with her body movements, only to lay sated, various limbs entangled, and reach for a handgun in the nightstand drawer and off her before she can say thank you?
i swear i'm not crazy. i've just seen The Others too many times for my own good.
there's much to be said for melodramatic music, the kind where someone's on the floor bleeding and someone else is unfeeling to the sight of blood on the rug. though no one ever died of a broken heart, people have come close or sunk into depression so low, desperation glazes over in their eyes and they find a way to break the cycle, permanently. the only thing that i'd say is that there's more than one way to die, and it'd be great if you showcased more of the ways these "bad girls" do it besides kisses and empty shell casings. great stuff.
i love it! there's just something about it that makes me want to read it over and over. besides the title drawing me in at first glance, the first stanza grabbed my attention with quite a bit of force. damn good one :)
Do you write music to these songs? I am in love with them. They are so... I have no words. haha. If I were queen of the world, you would be famous. I really need to stop rambling now -Andrya
Lol! This is funny, but I can understand your feelings in it. There are some good girls and some bad girls, I agree, even if I'm a girl, I guess I'm a good one, lol. It is kinda sad too, but it's true. Besides, we all have some good in us and some bad in us. Great lyrics, I loved them. Keep it up!
Lol! This is funny, but I can understand your feelings in it. There are some good girls and some bad girls, I agree, even if I'm a girl, I guess I'm a good one, lol. It is kinda sad too, but it's true. Besides, we all have some good in us and some bad in us. Great lyrics, I loved them. Keep it up!
butterfly bullets boy... i think im officially addicted to your stuff... i love the chorus and i completely agree with the good girls shouldnt... but you know... i have a top that says BOYS LIE and i was at this music fest and this boy had a top that said GIRLS ARE MEAN and i so agree'd! (funny thing was that ppl thought we were bf/gf and were fighting haha!) but yeah... the idea of bodies falling like rain drops is a very powerful image though i think im on to something... do all your poems/lyrics have bullets in them... or just the ones i have read...? is that an on purpose thing...? if so youve done brilliantly to make it not sound trashy and overused in your using it more than once thing you got going on... anyways yeah... everythings gray everyday is such a sad note to finish on... but i guess it is like that...
More great lyrics, I have so say that your work is a break from the uptight lyrics some people, I don't know what it is about your work, but I can just relax and read it. Several particularly great parts:
Raindrops fall like bodies One by one in the street Drowning like butterflies in the heat
With every streak down the window pane The raindrops seem to spell out your name And everything’s gray Everyday
Both have great imagery and would have taken me a while to think up. I'm going to comment some more before submitting something new, I'm working on it, got the images and everything but no words unfortunately, its driving me mad! Do you ever get that? Yeah, so, great write once again.
The set up of the lyrics is very nice. It isnt at all scattered and cryptic. I like that everything is spelled out. Sometimes I can get frusterated by that but in this case it was perfect. Awesome job. This will make a nice song with the right music to back it up.~*~amber~*~
Very lyrical here, a song for sure. I like the way you put a commonly overused theme (being hurt by a girl... it happens to all of us and still kept me interested. Stick some kicking guitar behind this and it could rock. Good job my friend, thanks for sharing.
Submission Name: Good Girls Don't Leave Us
Virgil 
